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Why do they keep mentioning magic when Glorinda hasn't shown any signs? Can they see something we can't?

You can drop the Ms when the occasion calls for it. You did it with Mattan Olmin. I keep thinking you'll do it with Glorinda and Tolly. McLichtensen and Hoi might flow better, or just drop the last names. It's very formal, and it's not something that I do in my stories. My characters have first names, and I use them. The last names are there for formal introductions, which are few and far between. I usually use their military ranks or titles (Ranger, Draoidh, etc.)

What does this villain from the prologue have on her that makes her give up her money or go without food for three days? What about him drives her to move from assignment to assignment and not take care of herself? This is the mystery that I keep coming back to.

Wow, this restaurant has a lot of art. It must do great business, but we've only seen a few people eating there. Or are we just not visiting at peak hours?

Yes, all the art programs think that all men must have mustaches and beards, and if you try to put more than three people in the picture, it screws up the colors. It's just a failure of the programs.

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