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>>"I'm sorry I was so short with you earlier,

Not the expression I'd use for her behavior.

>>They're covered.

This would be a good place to add some of the menu, to give an idea of the restaraunt. "We have the best fried fish in the city' or 'Our filet mignon is to die for' etc.

>>the other door,

Delete 'other' and give some details. "The office door, which opens off the alley" "The company door, which is on the main street". Give us some idea of how she made this mistake.

>>she'll bring you anything you would like

This seems odd in a couple of ways. Unless he is aware of her need for privacy, I think that it would be more natural to say, "You can eat free at the rest. while you are here, even off hours. Just ask the kitchen to..." Why would he assume she would be eating in her room or at work, and why would Belinda get stuck relaying the order?

>>No. That was bad for discipline.

So... given that I don't know much about the story so far, so much is still mysterious, this seems odd. If she was self motivated, I can get the 'bad for discipline' line. But since she is being motivated by fear, I would have thought, "The horned demon might find out and torture me for eternity'... ie a reaction vis a vis her fear, not 'disciplilne'..

And the decision doesn't make sense to me. If you can't work eat. Or else sleep. To get ready for work. Making a stupid decision out of fear makes sense, but not out of 'discipline'.

>>There had been no mention of children in the files. In fact, there were no romantic entanglements noted at all

Most people don't think of a child as a 'romantic entanglement'. I can think of several reasons, off the cuff, why people might have children's pictures around without the issue of a 'romantic entnglement.

>>make yourself at home.

Odd phrasing given the situation.

>>She would have been well beyond infancy at that point.

If this is something from her file, then list it, I think. "Her file showed her as thirty-five. She woudl have..."

>>what, if anything, was wrong with him,

This is an odd statement, that seems to come out of the blue. Why should something be wrong with him?

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