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Von's avatar

I don't know if it is just me.. me and the hundreds of fantasy books I have read... but I find it very off-putting to read a fantasy book with people in normal US clothes. Unless it is like a portal fantasy... in which case only one set of people should be wearing normal US clothes :)

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Von's avatar

>> it'll be easier.

It's a judgement call, but I think this should be 'It would be easier' or the contraction thereof. The rest of the dialogue is in the subjunctive.

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Von's avatar

>>There'd be rent, store,

Perhaps... "There would be records of her paying rent, making purchases..." It is the 'records' that they would find, no, not the rent itself?

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

Oh, a water nymph and a ghost. Very nice. And the casual familiarity between the three, it felt natural.

How far into the future have we jumped? As I recall, Glorina has never pestered Tolly to visit the woods.

Would a water nymph wear clothes? Or would she fabricate the appearance of clothes from water?

A water nymph might wear a baggy silk tunic and very little else, but that's just my impression.

I like the fact that magic can't fix everything. Her explanation of why she couldn't heat the water makes sense.

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Jasini KC's avatar

::blink:: Ghost? Oh, you mean Daved.

It's about two weeks into the "future".

A water nymph would wear clothing if she wanted to be seen in polite company. 😉And she does like being both reasonably fashionable and comfortable. 🙂

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

I got that after reading the next chapters. Very fashionable indeed.

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