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Von's avatar

So, is your little introduction meant to be part of the story? It seems awkward.

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Jasini KC's avatar

What do you mean? What do you find awkward about it? Do you think it would be better if An just shows up unannounced?

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Von's avatar

I was thinking about that. Obviously we all have it all the time... we need to introduce a new character. One of my favorite introduction is Gandalf and the Dwarves in the Hobbit.

What I mean by 'awkward' is that the info dump takes us out of the story. It would be nice if there was a story way to introduce her. Like in someone's thoughts, or over a phone call, etc. "Hey, Sue, I'm coming to see you this weekend." "What, no!" "Don't have time to see your sister?" "No, I mean, yes, but, it's such a long drive. My current job is two hours away from you." "Well, yes, but we haven't seen each other in six months..." etc

I got in that they are sisters, havent' seen each other, its a long way away, etc etc.

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Jasini KC's avatar

Ok, I had forgotten that I put the little note at the beginning. I only did that because I'm snippeting this so episodically that i don't expect people to remember that I mentioned her, and her odd name weeks ago. I was thinking that it was the phone call you found so awkward. (You still might.)

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