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Von's avatar

>>My boss would never forgive me for my betrayal.

This seems like a real climb down from the tension promised in the beginning of the story. There I got an impression of an almost omnipotent evil character eager to torture her to death. Now it almost seems as if she is merely upset because he 'wouldn't forgive her'... like one might be with a friend.

Weeks going by with nothing from the bad guy seems excessive. Full disclosure, I haven't been following along much, but what happened to him?

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Jasini KC's avatar

A few weeks isn't really that long a time. And part of the reason she's getting so antsy is fearful anticipation.

She really hates being Useless.

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Von's avatar

>>But I had nothing to do. I was useless. Worse than useless.

Ummm, why? Is she so incompetent she can't be helpful?

It would be really nice if more happened here.

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Jasini KC's avatar

Well, what she perceives and what others perceive tends to be different. I'll make sure that the edit from other peoples points of view has a few lines about how helpful she's being. And of course they don't fully trust her.

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